Having encouraged people to tear other Christian-film-reviews to pieces with their editing cutlery, I should put myself on the operating table as well. I do this to emphasize that I’m interested in better writing, not in belittling other review writers.
So, here is a somewhat-hurriedly written review of James Redford’s “Spin.”
Feel free to post any comments on what you would do to improve the review. I’m likely to take your advice next time I have a chance to sit down and improve it (which may not be until this weekend, when I can go home and find a few minutes at my desk.)
If I don’t see comments being posted, I’ll assume that somehow, in my twenty minutes at the computer last night, I actually produced something readable.
Really not bad for 20 minutes. There are about four or five small typos (including a missing word in your opening sentence). The most annoying thing about your review was that you used the cliché “scratches the surface” twice. It could use a little tightening and recasting, but it’s still far better than the previous two examples.
The film in question sort of sounds like All the Pretty Airplanes—it even features Ruben Blades!
And I agree you shouldn’t be too hard on young Redford. His dad directed some great films (Ordinary People, A River Runs through It, Quiz Show), but he also directed The Natural, which made him look like a “natural” in the Shakespearean sense. Even good directors have their clunkers.
…but Superman is DC, not Marvel…